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What do you think makes a visitor feel welcome? Explain.

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It is important to make acquaintances or guests feel comfortable and welcome when they visit your home. There may be various ways to satisfy visitors. However, one of the most essential elements is heartfelt sincerity. Let's suppose that you are invited to someone's home. Even though you are served delicious food and given a perfect room for the night, you might still want to leave if the host displays unpleasant behavior such as being unkind and emotionally distant. Similarly, imagine that you are traveling to new places or countries. Although those attractions may fall short of your expectations and you are exposed to some uncomfortable situations, you may still remember the experience positively for a long time, if people there kindly welcome you and leave a positive impression. In conclusion, touching someone's heart is not about offering material things, but about showing genuine kindness.

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Hi Isaac!
There is a better way to express one idea in this composition.
Please review.
We can discuss later in class.
You did well again today.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
It is important to make acquaintances or guests feel comfortable and welcome when they visit your home. 
>> Correct
There may be various ways to satisfy visitors. 
>> There may be various ways to do that.
However, one of the most essential elements is heartfelt sincerity. 
>> Correct
Let's suppose that you are invited to someone's home. 
>> Correct
Even though you are served delicious food and given a perfect room for the night, you might still want to leave if the host displays unpleasant behavior such as being unkind and emotionally distant. 
>> Correct
Similarly, imagine that you are traveling to new places or countries. 
>> Correct
Although those attractions may fall short of your expectations and you are exposed to some uncomfortable situations, you may still remember the experience positively for a long time, if people there kindly welcome you and leave a positive impression. 
>> Correct
In conclusion, touching someone's heart is not about offering material things, but about showing genuine kindness.
>> Correct
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