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My best friends meat is elementary school 2th grade. he is very fun.
But in elementary school 5th grade my best friend is very man.

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Here's your corrected composition, Jimmy.  Please take a look at the corrections below. Have a good night's sleep! 


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My best friends meat is elementary school 2th grade. he is very fun. But in elementary school 5th grade my best friend is very man. 
>>> My best friend from second grade in elementary school was really fun. But by fifth grade, my best friend had changed; he was more mature and manly.

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