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Who do you want to meet one day? why?

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I want to meet a friend one day. She is an elementarly shllo. friend. She was moved to the remote area when we was elementarly in 3rd grade. We was only two girls of same age in our village. So we played together everyday and went to school together. Our village had boys of same age, but we didn't play together. At thet time we thought that boys and girls couldn't play together. I felp very lonely after she moved. We havn't met again. I wonder how to she grew up, how to live, how many childen does she have. I want to meet old friend.

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Happy Monday, Ms. Eva!
This is a very nice story, and I got curious too. I was thinking the same thing. I am curious about my childhood friend, too, and I hope to meet her one day. I couldn't forget her because every time I see stars in the night sky, it reminds me of her, because she told me when we were young not to count stars. After all, if you do, we will see a ghost. My silly sister didn't believe her, so she counted 1-2-3. And believe it or not, we experienced what this friend told us. Sounds funny, but it was a real experience where my sister and I could not forget!
See you around!
Aki~

I want to meet a friend one day.
>>> CORRECT!

She is an elementarly shllo. friend.
>>> She is an elementary school friend.

She was moved to the remote area when we was elementarly in 3rd grade.
>>> She moved to the remote area when we were in the 3rd grade.

We was only two girls of same age in our village.
>>>  We were the only two girls of the same age in our village.

So we played together everyday and went to school together.
>>>  So we played together every day and went to school together.

Our village had boys of same age, but we didn't play together. 
>>>  Our village had boys of the same age, but we didn't play together. 

At thet time we thought that boys and girls couldn't play together. 
>>>  At that time we thought that boys and girls couldn't play together. 

I felp very lonely after she moved. We havn't met again.
>>>  I felt very lonely after she moved. We haven't met again.

I wonder how to she grew up, how to live, how many childen does she have.
>>> I wonder how she grew up, how she lives, and how many children she has.

I want to meet old friend.
>>> I want to meet that old friend.

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