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What is your ideal house?

작성자: 이*윤
2025-06-23 24

회원님의 영작문

Well, actually, there's an ideal house I've been dreaming of.
Simply, it's an American style house, which refers to a house with a garden in a very large house.
It is to grow plants and raise a cute dog in a large garden. When I enter the house, I can see the TV and sofa right in the living room with the fireplace. The kitchen is very spacious, has a large dining table that can invite many people, and it's a space where people can see the cooking right away.
Next, there is a large room that my parents use, and when I go up the stairs on the second floor, there is a room that my younger brother and I use separately. Also, the attic will be decorated with things that my brother and I like.
The bathroom has a large bathtub, so I can take a bubble bath like drama.
The most important thing is that there should be two bathrooms. In fact, my house where I live now has one bathroom, but it is inconvenient for the whole family to use, so everyone's wish is to move to a house with two bathrooms.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi! 

Thank you for sharing your ideal house. 
I was imagining it, and it seems to be a really cozy house for the entire family. ^^ 
I hope that sooner or later, you will be able to move to this kind of house. ~ 

~ Teacher Gina


Well, actually, there's an ideal house I've been dreaming of.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: There’s a dream home I’ve had in mind for a long time.

Simply, it's an American style house, which refers to a house with a garden in a very large house.
>> Simply put, it’s an American-style house with a garden and a spacious interior.

It is to grow plants and raise a cute dog in a large garden. 
>> I want to grow plants and raise a cute dog in the large garden.

When I enter the house, I can see the TV and sofa right in the living room with the fireplace. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: When I walk into the house, I imagine seeing a TV and sofa in the living room, along with a fireplace.

The kitchen is very spacious, has a large dining table that can invite many people, and it's a space where people can see the cooking right away.
>> The kitchen is very spacious, with a large dining table for guests, and an open layout where everyone can see the cooking.

Next, there is a large room that my parents use, and when I go up the stairs on the second floor, there is a room that my younger brother and I use separately.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: There’s a large bedroom for my parents, and upstairs, my younger brother and I each have our own rooms.

Also, the attic will be decorated with things that my brother and I like.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: We'll decorate the attic with our favorite things

The bathroom has a large bathtub, so I can take a bubble bath like drama.
>> The bathroom has a large bathtub, so I can take bubble baths like in dramas.

The most important thing is that there should be two bathrooms. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: What matters most is having two bathrooms.

In fact, my house where I live now has one bathroom, but it is inconvenient for the whole family to use, so everyone's wish is to move to a house with two bathrooms.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Right now, our house only has one bathroom, which is inconvenient for the whole family. So, we all wish to move to a home with two bathrooms
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