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What is your most unforgettable autumn memory in Korea?

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actually, i don't have special memory in autumn, but i was fun last year in autumn.
i went to taejeongdae with girlfriend in busan.
taejeongdae is busan's famous sights.
taejeongdae is sea nearby. sea sight was very beautiful. and i ate fall spotted sardine.
fall spotted sardine taste good during in fall and weather was very good.
so i ate delicious fall spotted sardin at good view.

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Hi, Hun!
I tried to search for Taejeongdae because it was my first time hearing about this place, and it was indeed a very beautiful place. I saw that you can view the ocean from there. It's also nice that aside from the view, you were able to enjoy the food during the fall season.
- T. Caitlyn 
actually, i don't have special memory in autumn, but i was fun last year in autumn.
>> Actually, I don't have any special memories in autumn, but I had fun last year during autumn.
i went to taejeongdae with girlfriend in busan.
>> I went to Taejeongdae with my girlfriend in Busan.
taejeongdae is busan's famous sights.
>> Taejeongdae is one of Busan's famous sights.
taejeongdae is sea nearby. 
>> Taejeongdae is located near the sea.
sea sight was very beautiful. 
>> The sea view was very beautiful.
And I ate fall spotted sardine.
>> CORRECT
fall spotted sardine taste good during in fall and weather was very good.
>> Fall spotted sardines taste good in the fall, and the weather was very nice.
so i ate delicious fall spotted sardin at good view.
>> So I ate delicious fall spotted sardines with a good view.
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