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If you had to choose between a satisfying job and a well-paid one, which would you choose?

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2025-06-27 26

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Well, that's a very difficult question.
If I were you, I would choose a satisfying job.
If I choose a well-paid job, I will live a leisurely life and live without worrying about money because I get paid a lot, but I don't think I have time to myself. Because I will have to work a lot. Maybe I'll live a life where the work-life balance I'm talking about these days is not kept. As a result, it has become a painful life and it is getting harder, so I think I will eventually quit the company.
If I choose a satisfying job, I think I can spend time alone, although I may not be able to live a leisurely life.
I think time alone is essential because I can improve my resilience and prepare for tomorrow. Therefore, I will choose a satisfying job because it is very important to have time alone.

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Hello, Yun!
I missed checking your composition~ hahaha! Thank you for writing again!
Chammy

Well, that's a very difficult question.
OR
>> It's a kind of tricky question.
If I were you, I would choose a satisfying job.
OR
>> If I were to choose, I'd rather have a satisfying job.
If I choose a well-paid job, I will live a leisurely life and live without worrying about money because I get paid a lot, but I don't think I have time to myself. 
>> If I choose a well-paid job, I will live a leisurely life and live without worrying about money because I get paid a lot, but I don't think I have time for myself.
Because I will have to work a lot. Maybe I'll live a life where the work-life balance I'm talking about these days is not kept.
OR
>> Because  I'll need to put in a lot of work and may not live a life in which the work-life balance I am talking about these days is not maintained.
 As a result, it has become a painful life, and it is getting harder, so I think I will eventually quit the company.
OR
>> Therefore, I may live a burdensome life that gets challenging, which can lead me to quit my post.
If I choose a satisfying job, I think I can spend time alone, although I may not be able to live a leisurely life.
OR
>> Even if I might not be able to lead a leisurely life, I believe that I can spend time on myself if I choose a fulfilling career.
I think time alone is essential because I can improve my resilience and prepare for tomorrow. 
OR
>> I believe in the importance of having personal time as it allows me to strengthen my resilience and get ready for the future.
Therefore, I will choose a satisfying job because it is very important to have time alone
OR
>> Thus, I will choose a fulfilling job because it is crucial to have quality personal time.
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