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How important are paid leave days to you when choosing a job?

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It is not important to me.
In my case, I prefer to have leave days freely
rather than being paid it by money.
It's not the reason of me to have kid.
I belive that It is just my charictor to enjoy break time.
I also have low energy. I want to have rest time today, too.
So I'm staying in my company after finishing work.
Because I don't have enough energy to go home.

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Hi Stella, 
I love taking breaks too. I believe breaks are important because they help recharge us physically, mentally, and emotionally.
Always take care of your health and try not to overdo things. Remember, health is wealth. 
Thank you once again for taking the time to answer this essay. See you later! :)
- Teacher Elly~


It is not important to me.
>> CORRECT

In my case, I prefer to have leave days freely rather than being paid it by money.
>> In my case, I prefer to take leave freely rather than receive money for it.

It's not the reason of me to have kid.
>> That's not the reason I want to have a child.

I belive that It is just my charictor to enjoy break time.
>> I believe that it's just my character to enjoy break time.
OR >> I think it's just part of my personality to enjoy taking breaks.

I also have low energy. I want to have rest time today, too.
>> I'm feeling low on energy. I also want to take a break today.
OR >> I'm also low on energy. I want to rest today, too.

So I'm staying in my company after finishing work.
>> So I'm staying at the office after finishing work.

Because I don't have enough energy to go home.
>> I'm staying because I don't have enough energy to go home.
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