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What are the benefits of playing sports?

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There are many benefits of playing sports. We can improve our physical and mental well-being. Physically, we can enhance the immune system, stamina and cardiovascular health. I play soccer every weekend, which makes me feel healthy and energized. I also go running regularly along the riverside near my house. Since I started running, I have been able to overcome my insomnia and feel refreshed. According to Korean Times, one of the most renowned newspapers in Korea, over 90 percent of people who run regularly showed better stamina and even better focus at work and while studying. If you feel stressed or are struggling with your health, don't hesitate to start playing sports.

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Hi Isaac!
You have made really good points.
This is very well written.
Thank you.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
There are many benefits of playing sports. 
>> Correct
We can improve our physical and mental well-being. 
>> Correct
Physically, we can enhance the immune system, stamina and cardiovascular health. 
>> Correct
I play soccer every weekend, which makes me feel healthy and energized. 
>> Correct
I also go running regularly along the riverside near my house. 
>> Correct
Since I started running, I have been able to overcome my insomnia and feel refreshed. 
>> Correct
According to Korean Times, one of the most renowned newspapers in Korea, over 90 percent of people who run regularly showed better stamina and even better focus at work and while studying.
>> Correct
If you feel stressed or are struggling with your health, don't hesitate to start playing sports.
>> Correct
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