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What\'s your favorite thing about your home? Why?

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My favorite about my home where I lived with my parents was my room. In short, because it was my hideout!
The place where I spend the most time was my room, but when I was in my room, I felt cozy and comfortable. It was also a space where I could do whatever I wanted to do. For example, watching movies and dramas that I like, or dancing while listening to exciting music with earphones in my ears.
But my favorite thing about my home where I live now is bedclothes.
The bedcIothes is pink with cute animals on it, and it's perfect for my taste.
There is a more special reason, and this is the first bedcIothes my parents bought me to go to the dorm. I've been using it for four years while living in the dormitory andd I've been using it until now, living alone, so I'm all the more impressed.

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Thank you for submitting your answer to me. ^^ 
I appreciate you for sharing your favorite thing at home. It reflects how it was important and gave comfort to you. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina


My favorite about my home where I lived with my parents was my room. 
>> My favorite thing about the home where I lived with my parents was my room.

In short, because it was my hideout!
>> Simply put, it was my personal hideout!

The place where I spend the most time was my room, but when I was in my room, I felt cozy and comfortable.
>> I spent most of my time in my room, and being there made me feel cozy and comfortable.

It was also a space where I could do whatever I wanted to do.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: It was also a space where I could do whatever I wanted.

For example, watching movies and dramas that I like, or dancing while listening to exciting music with earphones in my ears.
>> For example, I would watch my favorite movies and dramas or dance while listening to exciting music through my earphones.

But my favorite thing about my home where I live now is bedclothes.
>> But my favorite thing about the home where I live now is my bedding.

The bedcIothes is pink with cute animals on it, and it's perfect for my taste.
>> The bedding is pink with cute animals on it, and it's exactly my style.

There is a more special reason, and this is the first bedcIothes my parents bought me to go to the dorm. 
>> There's a more special reason- it¡¯s the first bedding my parents bought for me when I moved into the dorm.

I've been using it for four years while living in the dormitory andd I've been using it until now, living alone, so I'm all the more impressed.
>> I used it for four years in the dorm, and I¡¯m still using it now while living alone- so it feels even more meaningful to me.
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