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The best one I choose is salt bread with milk cream. Surface of bread is really crispy and there is a butter hole inside bread. When we eat only salt bread, it tastes salty and buttery but we eat bread and cream together, their harmony is perfect. We can enjoy every tastes like sweet, salty and buttery. I think I like sweet and salty taste and milk cream inside the bread is the best one that I've every tried. And my friend's mother bought sandwiches from Sungsimdang. Apple brick cheese sandwich is the best one among them. It's also sweet because of honey and apple, and salty because of ham and cheese.

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Hi, Megan^^
Thank you for sharing!
Your descriptions make me want to try the bread. 
_T. SHAY^^
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The best one I choose is salt bread with milk cream. 
>>The best one I chose was the salt bread with milk cream. 
Surface of bread is really crispy and there is a butter hole inside bread. 
>>The surface of the bread is really crispy and there is a pocket of butter inside. 
When we eat only salt bread, it tastes salty and buttery but we eat bread and cream together, their harmony is perfect. 
>>When we eat only the salt bread, it tastes salty and buttery. But we eat bread and cream together, the combination is perfect. 
We can enjoy every tastes like sweet, salty and buttery. 
>>We can enjoy all flavors--sweet, salty and buttery. 
I think I like sweet and salty taste and milk cream inside the bread is the best one that I've every tried. 
>>I really enjoy sweet and salty flavors, and the milk cream in the bread is the best I've ever had.
And my friend's mother bought sandwiches from Sungsimdang. 
>>Correct
OR: And my friend's mother picked up some sandwiches from Sungsimdang for us.
Apple brick cheese sandwich is the best one among them. 
>>Correct
OR: Out of all of them, the apple brick cheese sandwich was the best.
It's also sweet because of honey and apple, and salty because of ham and cheese.
>>Correct
OR: The honey and apple make it sweet, while the ham and cheese add a salty touch.

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