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​​Q : Write a short paragraph (3 - 5 sentences or more) about a time you had to carry on with something even though it was difficult.

A : To me, the time I have to carry on is now.
Recently, I am facing some difficult things.
First, I have to find new buyers and make appointments for the future business trip.
Second, I have to finish video call class within this year to get a subsidy from my company.
Finally, I have to learn AIs and make a result that can support co-workers.
They are very difficult things but I am thinking that it can be very helpful to me after completing them.

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Hi Eddie! It¡¯s so great to see your writing again, you¡¯ve really done an excellent job with this response. I can clearly see your growth, not just in your English skills, but also in your mindset. You¡¯ve shared a real and honest moment from your life, and the way you organized your thoughts was very clear and easy to follow.

I especially admire how you listed the three challenges you're currently facing. That structure makes your paragraph very strong and focused. Your final sentence also gives the reader a sense of your positive attitude and determination, which is very inspiring. Even though these tasks sound tough, you're already showing the kind of mindset that leads to success.

You¡¯re doing a great job balancing your work, your goals, and your personal development. Keep it up, Eddie, I¡¯m really proud of you. You're on the right track!

~Teacher Cathy

 

To me, the time I have to carry on is now.

>>CORRECT

OR>>To me, this is the moment I must carry on.

Recently, I am facing some difficult things.

>>Recently, I have been facing some difficult things.

First, I have to find new buyers and make appointments for the future business trip.

>>CORRECT

OR>>First, I need to find new buyers and schedule appointments for an upcoming business trip.

Second, I have to finish video call class within this year to get a subsidy from my company.

>>Secondly, I have to complete the video call class within this year to receive a subsidy from my company.

Finally, I have to learn AIs and make a result that can support co-workers.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Finally, I need to learn about AI and produce results that can help my co-workers.

They are very difficult things but I am thinking that it can be very helpful to me after completing them.

>>These things are very difficult, but I believe they will be very helpful to me once I complete them.

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