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Write about a teacher who had a strong influence on you. What did you learn form him or her?

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I met one person who was a teacher during my military service. He had taught physical education in middle school before serving his service. Therefore, he didn't teach me firsthand. he was eight years older than me, which was an uncommon case, since most men in Korea usually serve their duty in the early of 20s. He was my enlistment buddy, which was truly fortunate for me. Whenever I had a hard time dealing with problems related to tasks and relationships, he provided sincere consolations and effective solutions. Although he was much older than me, he felt like close friend rather than authoritative teacher. Thanks to his help, I could overcome difficult situations and complete my military service successfully. Even now, I keep in touch with him from time to time.

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Hi Isaac!
Great job with painting a picture of your story.
It makes me understand what you experienced.
Take note of the usual expressions I included.
Review them and we'll discuss them later.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I met one person who was a teacher during my military service. 
>> Correct
He had taught physical education in middle school before serving his service. 
>> He had taught physical education in middle school before serving in the military.
Therefore, he didn't teach me firsthand. 
>> Correct
he was eight years older than me, which was an uncommon case, since most men in Korea usually serve their duty in the early of 20s. 
>> He was eight years older than me, which was unusual, since most men in Korea usually serve their military duty in their early 20s.
He was my enlistment buddy, which was truly fortunate for me. 
>> Correct
Whenever I had a hard time dealing with problems related to tasks and relationships, he provided sincere consolations and effective solutions. 
>> Correct
Although he was much older than me, he felt like close friend rather than authoritative teacher. 
>> Although he was much older than me, he felt like a close friend rather than an authoritative teacher. 
Thanks to his help, I could overcome difficult situations and complete my military service successfully. 
>> Correct
Even now, I keep in touch with him from time to time.
>> Correct
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