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Do you think people today are more or less willing to help others than in the past? Why?

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2025-07-09 3

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I think people today tend to be less willing to help others. In the past, despite material deficiency, it was common for people to readily help one another and show consideration. In contrast, in today¡¯s fast-paced society, competition and materialism are considered more important. These days people prioritize their own lives and they love themselves, but they don't seem very interested in helping others. Of course, I don't mean that all people are like that but social climate is shifting. Helping others such as volunteering or donations might be considered unnoticeable and not directly beneficial, though it will help your daily life brighter and more fulfilling.

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Hi Isaac!
Thank you for still taking the time to do your homework.
The sentences you used were right on point.
They are direct and most are grammatically correct.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I think people today tend to be less willing to help others. 
>> Correct
In the past, despite material deficiency, it was common for people to readily help one another and show consideration. 
>> Correct
In contrast, in today¡¯s fast-paced society, competition and materialism are considered more important. 
>> Correct
These days people prioritize their own lives and they love themselves, but they don't seem very interested in helping others. 
>> Correct
Of course, I don't mean that all people are like that but social climate is shifting. 
>> Correct
Helping others such as volunteering or donations might be considered unnoticeable and not directly beneficial, though it will help your daily life brighter and more fulfilling.
>> Helping others such as volunteering or donating might be considered unnoticeable and not directly beneficial, but it will make your daily life brighter and more fulfilling.
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