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In 3-5 sentences, talk about your most unforgettable summer experience.

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Twenty years ago, I went to the beach with my sister and her family. On the way back home, a guy fell down in front of my brother-in-law's car, before he was hit by the car. The man was drunk, and he couldn't move. We called police officers, because he wanted. After the police officers arrived, women who were on a bus, shouted at them "The car didn't hit him, He fell down himself". We got back home without any problems.

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Good evening, Hwanny! ^^,)

Your story is indeed memorable because it was an unfortunate incident. Thankfully, it ended well for you and your sister's family.

Being ready and flexible is a good idea because unexpected things can happen at any time. Keeping an optimistic and adaptable attitude is essential while dealing with the unexpected. You can respond more skillfully to unforeseen circumstances if you are aware of your surroundings and potential hazards. 

Thank you so much for this composition.^^

__T. Mayleen :)


Twenty years ago, I went to the beach with my sister and her family.
>>> CORRECT
On the way back home, a guy fell down in front of my brother-in-law's car, before he was hit by the car.
>>> On our way back home, a guy fell down in front of my brother-in-law's car before he was hit by the car.
The man was drunk, and he couldn't move.
>>> CORRECT
We called police officers, because he wanted. After the police officers arrived, women who were on a bus, shouted at them "The car didn't hit him, He fell down himself".
>>> We called the police because he wanted to. After the police officers arrived, women who were on a bus shouted at them, "The car didn't hit him; he fell down himself."
We got back home without any problems.
>>> CORRECT
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