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What do you think are the necessary key elements for someone to succeed in life? (

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I guess the key element to succeed life are positivity,resilience,hardworking. I think like this because those 3 elements works great together and for all of us. If we have positive attitude and mindset, It makes us easy to collaborate with others so that we can have better experience.
Also I f we work hard, we can achieve anything but incase of failure, we should have resilience so that we can stand up against. So these 3 are th most importantthings to succeed.

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Thank you for this Eugene! I agree, those key elements are very necessary.

I guess the key element to succeed life are positivity,resilience,hardworking. 
>>>  I guess the key elements to succeed life are positivity, resilience, and hard work. 
I think like this because those 3 elements works great together and for all of us. 
>>> I think like this because those 3 elements work great together for all of us.  
If we have positive attitude and mindset, It makes us easy to collaborate with others so that we can have better experience.
>>> If we have positive attitude and mindset, it makes it easy for us to collaborate with others so that we can have better experiences.  
Also I f we work hard, we can achieve anything but incase of failure, we should have resilience so that we can stand up against. 
>>>  Also, if we work hard, we can achieve anything. But in case of failure, we should have resilience so that we can stand up again. 
>>> OR: Also, if we work hard, we can achieve anything. But in case of failure, we should have resilience so that we can get back on our feet.
So these 3 are the most important things to succeed.
>>>  correct
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