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Would you like to ride a flying car? Why or why not?

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2025-07-14 5

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WeII, fIying car seems to be a story of the distant future, but I want to ride a fIying car.
First of aII, I love fIying. One of the reasons I Iike to traveI is aIso because I take a plane.
I think fIying car can give me the same feeIing as airpIanes. That's why I want to ride a fIying car.
However, we need to assume that we're going to g o at the same speed as an airplane, right?
If there is a fIying car and I can ride it, I want to go to a country far away. So, I want to go to the U.S. because I want to go to the mainIand and use the EngIish I have Iearned so far. Maybe It's going to be a big chaIIenge.
But fIying car wiII not be safe. IronicaIIy, it's not safe because it fIies. Just as an airpIane fIies so IoudIy in an accident, a flying car can also lead to big accident if it occurs. It wiII increase the IikeIihood of another accident as cars falI.

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Hi! 

Thank you for submitting your essay about your thoughts on flying cars and traveling. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina



WeII, fIying car seems to be a story of the distant future, but I want to ride a fIying car.
>> Well, a flying car still seems like something from the distant future, but I want to ride one.

First of aII, I love fIying. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or:  I really enjoy being in the air.

One of the reasons I Iike to traveI is aIso because I take a plane.
>> One of the reasons I like traveling is that I get to ride on a plane.
>> Or: I enjoy flying, so I like traveling by plane.

I think fIying car can give me the same feeIing as airpIanes. 
>> I think a flying car could give me the same feeling as flying in an airplane.

That's why I want to ride a fIying car.
>> CORRECT.

However, we need to assume that we're going to g o at the same speed as an airplane, right?
>> However, we¡¯d have to assume it goes as fast as an airplane, right?

If there is a fIying car and I can ride it, I want to go to a country far away. 
>> If there is a flying car and I can ride it, I want to go to a faraway country. 

So, I want to go to the U.S. because I want to go to the mainIand and use the EngIish I have Iearned so far.
>> I¡¯d like to go to the U.S. so I can visit the mainland and use the English I¡¯ve learned.

Maybe It's going to be a big chaIIenge.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: It might turn as a big challenge. 

But fIying car wiII not be safe. 
>> But flying cars might not be safe.

IronicaIIy, it's not safe because it fIies. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Ironically, flying makes it more dangerous.

Just as an airpIane fIies so IoudIy in an accident, a flying car can also lead to big accident if it occurs. 
>> Just as airplane crashes can be catastrophic, accidents involving flying cars could be very serious too.

It wiII increase the IikeIihood of another accident as cars falI.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or:  It could increase the risk of accidents, especially if cars fall from the sky.
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