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Yes, although my family roles a more substantial role in my life, choosing your own ¡°family¡± through friendships is not only possible, but often essential for many people¡¯s emotional well-being.

Friendships can grow so deep that they take on the role of family — people celebrate life events together, raise kids together if I got married too, or provide support in times of crisis it it were available to deal with by my helps. In essence, the emotional bonds, loyalty, and shared experiences can make these relationships just as strong — or stronger — than traditional family ties.

Thank you for your sincere question that made me think more thoughtfully.

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Hi, Charlie^^
Thank you for sharing.
That's a really inspiring answer!
Thank you for your honest thoughts too.
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Yes, although my family roles a more substantial role in my life, choosing your own ¡°family¡± through friendships is not only possible, but often essential for many people¡¯s emotional well-being.
>>Yes, although my family plays a more substantial role in my life, choosing your own ¡°family¡± through friendships is not only possible, but often essential for many people¡¯s emotional well-being.
Friendships can grow so deep that they take on the role of family; people celebrate life events together, raise kids together if I got married too, or provide support in times of crisis it it were available to deal with by my helps. 
>>Friendships can grow so deep that they take on the role of family. People celebrate life events together and raise kids together--including mine if I get married too--and provide support in times of crisis, when they are available and willing to help.
In essence, the emotional bonds, loyalty, and shared experiences can make these relationships just as strong — or stronger — than traditional family ties.
>>In essence, the emotional bonds, loyalty, and shared experiences can make these relationships just as strong--if not  stronger-- than traditional family ties.
Thank you for your sincere question that made me think more thoughtfully.
>>Correct
OR: I appreciate your sincere question--it prompted me to reflect deeply.


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