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1,World WarII broughtabout many changes and influences both enconomically and politically around the world.
2, Korea gainded independence from Japanese colonial rule.
3,Those who grew up during that time forced a time of chaos.
4,Korea was divided into South and North under the influnce of the United States and the Soviet Union and then we experienced the Korean War.
5,korea was enconomically very poor.
6,Although Korea has experenced enconomic diffilties and social chaos, Koreans created
their current prosperity with their desire for democratic society and strong will to live.

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1,World WarII broughtabout many changes and influences both enconomically and politically around the world.
>>> World War II brought about many economic and political changes around the world.
>> OR: Global economic structures and political landscapes were deeply altered by the events of World War II.

2, Korea gainded independence from Japanese colonial rule.
>> Korea gained independence from Japanese colonial rule.
>> OR: Korea regained its sovereignty following Japanese occupation.

3,Those who grew up during that time forced a time of chaos.
>> Those who grew up during that period experienced a time of chaos.

4,Korea was divided into South and North under the influnce of the United States and the Soviet Union and then we experienced the Korean War.
>> Korea was divided into South and North due to the influence of the United States and the Soviet Union, which ultimately led to the Korean War.

5, Korea was enconomically very poor.
>> OR: Korea faced severe economic hardship.

6, Although Korea has experenced enconomic diffilties and social chaos, Koreans created
their current prosperity with their desire for democratic society and strong will to live.
>> Despite experiencing economic hardship and social unrest, Koreans built their current prosperity through their desire for a democratic society and a strong will to survive.


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