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How can the government rebuild trust with the medical community while pushing needed reforms? What s

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The current standoff between the government and the medical community seems to have arisen from the government’s unilateral push its medical reform plan. The previous administration should have taken a more reciprocal and collaborative approach to address issues across the entire medical system. For example, offering greater incentives or benefits to doctors who choose to work in underserved regions or in less popular but essential specialties, such as pediatrics, could have been an effective strategy.

If both parties had worked together to tackle these challenges, they could have advanced the Korean healthcare system even further. Moreover, it is important for doctors to reflect on their commitment to the healthcare system and to their patients. Some responsibility for this impasses also lies with doctors' profit-driven mindset. Doctors should seriously reflect on why they chose this profession and renew their dedication to serving patients.

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Steve, 

Thanks for sharing your insights. I agree with all of it. 

Nice one!


-Teacher Ash

The current standoff between the government and the medical community seems to have arisen from the government’s unilateral push its medical reform plan. 

>>> The current standoff between the government and the medical community seems to have arisen from the government’s unilateral push for its medical reform plan. 


The previous administration should have taken a more reciprocal and collaborative approach to address issues across the entire medical system.

>>> CORRECT!


 For example, offering greater incentives or benefits to doctors who choose to work in underserved regions or in less popular but essential specialties, such as pediatrics, could have been an effective strategy.

>>> For example, offering greater incentives or benefits to doctors who choose to work in underserved regions or less popular but essential specialties, such as pediatrics, could have been an effective strategy.


If both parties had worked together to tackle these challenges, they could have advanced the Korean healthcare system even further.

>>> CORRECT!


 Moreover, it is important for doctors to reflect on their commitment to the healthcare system and to their patients.

>>> Moreover, doctors need to reflect on their commitment to the healthcare system and their patients.


 Some responsibility for this impasses also lies with doctors' profit-driven mindset.

>>> The responsibility also lies with the doctors' mindset.


 Doctors should seriously reflect on why they chose this profession and renew their dedication to serving patients.

>>> CORRECT!
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