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Do you think it\'s important to take vacations regularly? Why or why not?

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I think recharging the energy to our mind and body is very important thing.
If we only have to spend out energy to do something, we should face on unfortunery in out life.
So I think we have to regularly take a rest after some works.
Therefore, I believe adults also need regular vocation the same as kids.

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Hi Stella,
As always, thank you for taking the time to answer this essay. :)
Absolutely! Rest is for everyone. I hope that when you go on vacation, you can completely disconnect from work and fully enjoy your time off. 
Rest isn¡¯t a luxury, it¡¯s a necessity. 
Thank you once again for your time tonight. See you again on Thursday! ^.^
- Teacher Elly~


I think recharging the energy to our mind and body is very important thing.
>> I think recharging our mind and body is very important.

If we only have to spend out energy to do something, we should face on unfortunery in out life.
>> If we only use our energy without resting, we may face misfortunes in life.

So I think we have to regularly take a rest after some works.
>> So I think we need to take regular breaks after doing some work.
OR >> So I think we need to get some rest after doing some work.

Therefore, I believe adults also need regular vocation the same as kids.
>> Therefore, I believe adults also need regular vacations, just like kids.
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