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HOMEWORK: How do you deal with bad weather when hiking?

If it rains while hiking, it will go down quickly.
To be honest, when it rains, there are very few ways I can do it when I am riding a mountain. It is just to go somewhere to avoid the rain or go down. Nature is so beautiful, but on the other hand, it is also such a scary existence. I recently saw the news that a person is killed by a heavy rain. A lot of rain becomes a sharp knife that can kill people. The idea of being able to control the weather or avoid the weather is wrong.

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Hello, Alex!
Thank you for taking the time to write down your answer! I read it all and made some corrections~ ^_^
Chammy
If it rains while hiking, it will go down quickly.
>> If it rains while hiking, it runs down quickly.
To be honest, when it rains, there are very few ways I can do it when I am riding a mountain.
>> Honestly, when it rains, there are only a few things I can do when climbing a mountain.
It is just to go somewhere to avoid the rain or go down. 
>> It is just to go somewhere to avoid the rain, or else just go down.
Nature is so beautiful, but on the other hand, it is also such a scary existence.
>> The nature is beautiful, but on the other hand, it is also such a scary existence.
 I recently saw the news that a person is killed by a heavy rain. 
>> I recently saw the news that a person was killed by heavy rain. 
OR
>> I just came across news that a person died due to inclement weather.
A lot of rain becomes a sharp knife that can kill people.
OR
>> Heavy rain can kill people like a sharp knife.
 The idea of being able to control the weather or avoid the weather is wrong.
OR
>> I think anticipating the weather is very unpredictable, and avoidance is impossible.
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