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Q : Would you rather repair a broken phone or buy a new one? Why?

A : I will buy a new one if I bought a phone more than 2 years ago.
But if I bought a phone less than 2 years ago, I will repair the phone.
It is because we normally make a deal as 2 years in Korea.
Before a deal is over, changing a phone is quite expensive.
So, my choice can be changed by duration.

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Hi Eddy, 
Thank you for taking the time to respond to this essay and share your insights. :)
Indeed, it¡¯s more practical to replace a phone once the contract period has ended.
Thank you for your time tonight. See you again tomorrow. 
- Teacher Elly~


A : I will buy a new one if I bought a phone more than 2 years ago.
>> I will buy a new one if I have had my phone for more than two years.
OR >> I would buy a new one if I had bought a phone more than 2 years ago.

But if I bought a phone less than 2 years ago, I will repair the phone.
>> 
But if I bought it less than two years ago, I will repair it.
OR >> But if I have had the phone for less than two years, I will have it repaired.

It is because we normally make a deal as 2 years in Korea.
>> 
This is because phone contracts in Korea usually last for two years.
OR >> This is because we usually sign two-year phone contracts in Korea.

Before a deal is over, changing a phone is quite expensive.
>> 
Before the contract ends, changing phones is quite expensive.
OR >> It¡¯s quite expensive to change phones before the contract ends.

So, my choice can be changed by duration.
>> So, my decision depends on how long I¡¯ve had the phone.
OR >> So, how long I¡¯ve had the phone affects my decision.
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