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Yes, many people do rely too much on cars nowadays—especially in places where public transportation is limited or urban planning has prioritized vehicles over walkability. This reliance has both personal and societal consequences:

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Hi, Charlie^^
Thank you for sharing.
Those are some good points.
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Yes, many people do rely too much on cars nowadays; especially in places where public transportation is limited or urban planning has prioritized vehicles over walkability. 
>>Yes, many people do rely too much on cars nowadays, especially in places where public transportation is limited or urban planning has prioritized vehicles over walkability.
OR: Nowadays, many people depend heavily on cars, particularly in areas where public transportation is lacking or where cities are designed more for cars than pedestrians.
This reliance has both personal and societal consequences.
>>Correct
OR: Such reliance brings about both personal and social consequences.

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