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Hi Hyeon yeong. You did well giving short information about your hometown. Your sentences show what you want to say, and with just a few small changes they become clear and natural. Keep practicing writing about places and things you know. It helps you build confidence and learn how to express ideas better in English. I will keep helping you step by step.

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It is a my hometown
>> It is my hometown.

There is changwon
>> It is in Changwon.

Famous is big cafes
>> It is famous for its big cafes.
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