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Can a ceasefire truly bring peace without addressing root causes such as land rights, borders, or po

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2025-07-23 74

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A ceasefire is a temporary halt to conflict based on mutual agreement, but it often leaves the door open for war to break out again. As you pointed out, achieving lasting peace requires addressing the root causes of conflict, such as disputes over land rights. In many cases, the parties directly involved are unable to resolve these long-standing issues on their own. Therefore, major powers and neighboring countries must play a constructive role in encouraging compromise and them meet halfway. Prolonging war benefits no one. But unfortunately, great powers sometimes exploit conflicts or create divisions to serve their own interests. This is the behavior the global community—including the United Nations—must work together to prevent. We have to have it in mind that selfish actions and attitudes in international relations do nothing to help solve the urgent global challenges such as climate change and the resulting economic and social damage.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Mr. Steve, 

Thanks for sharing your ideas here. I agree with what you’ve said. Sad, but it’s true. There is so much exploitation going on in this war. 


A ceasefire is a temporary halt to conflict based on mutual agreement, but it often leaves the door open for war to break out again.

>>CORRECT!


 As you pointed out, achieving lasting peace requires addressing the root causes of conflict, such as disputes over land rights.

>>CORRECT!


 In many cases, the parties directly involved are unable to resolve these long-standing issues on their own. 

>>CORRECT!


Therefore, major powers and neighboring countries must play a constructive role in encouraging compromise and them meet halfway.

>>Therefore, major powers and neighboring countries must play a constructive role in encouraging compromise and meet halfway.


 Prolonging war benefits no one. But unfortunately, great powers sometimes exploit conflicts or create divisions to serve their own interests.

>> Prolonging the war benefits no one. But unfortunately, great powers sometimes exploit conflicts or create divisions to serve their interests.


 This is the behavior the global community—including the United Nations—must work together to prevent.

>> This is the behavior the global community, including the United Nations, must work together to prevent.


 We have to have it in mind that selfish actions and attitudes in international relations do nothing to help solve the urgent global challenges such as climate change and the resulting economic and social damage.

>> We have to keep in mind that selfish actions and attitudes in international relations do nothing to help solve the urgent global challenges, such as climate change and the resulting economic and social damage.
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