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1. Where is it best for you to stay over?

It is best for me to stay over my own room.
Because I have to spend my time on everyday.
This makes me stay calm and remind today's my talking or behaviors.
It is very helpful for me to enforce myself

2. When was the last time you stayed over at your friend's house?

Last summer vacation, I went to my university friend's hometown with my friends.
We played a lot of games and ate delicious foods too!
We just happy to talking each other.
We went to sleep on late night because we didn't realize the time
I will go to her house next month again!

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Good day, Nicole. 
Below are some corrections for your composition. Keep learning!
-Teacher Jessa
It is best for me to stay over my own room. Because I have to spend my time on everyday.
>>It¡¯s best for me to stay in my own room because I need time for myself every day.
This makes me stay calm and remind today's my talking or behaviors.
>>Being alone helps me stay calm and think about what I said or did during the day.
It is very helpful for me to enforce myself.
>>It¡¯s also a great way for me to strengthen myself.
Last summer vacation, I went to my university friend's hometown with my friends.
>>Last summer vacation, I visited my university friend¡¯s hometown with a few other friends.
We played a lot of games and ate delicious foods too!
>>We played a lot of games and enjoyed delicious food!
We just happy to talking each other.
>>We were just happy to talk and spend time together.
We went to sleep on late night because we didn't realize the time
>>We went to bed very late because we didn¡¯t notice how much time had passed.
I will go to her house next month again!
>>I¡¯m planning to visit her house again next month!








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