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영작교정 게시판

영어 말하기와 쓰기를 동시에 잡는다!

자신 있게 쓸 수 있는 영작문을 위해 파워잉글리쉬 수업을 수강하시는
회원님들께 무료로 제공해드리는 부가 서비스로, 전문 분야를 제외한 자유 주제
또는 강사님이 내주시는 과제를 회원님께서 영어로 작성해주시면,
담당 강사 님께서 ‘문법 오류 교정’ 과 ‘더 나은 영어식 표현’으로 교정해주는
서비스 입니다.

regarding of lesson 5

작성자: 최*철
2025-07-24 84

회원님의 영작문

Yes, I partly agree with this idea. Movies are generally more accessible because they are widely distributed, affordable, and convenient to watch. In contrast, plays often require going to a theater which is located in specific area of a country, purchasing tickets, and sometimes even traveling to specific cities, which makes them less accessible to the general public.
On the other hand, plays are often considered more artistic because of their raw, live nature. Theater performances rely heavily on the actors’ presence, timing, and emotional expression, without the help of editing, CGI, or camera angles. This can create a more intimate and intense experience, which many people find artistically rich and meaningful.
However, what i consider the most important in this quention is that both films and plays can be incredibly artistic or purely for entertainment, depending on how they are made. Some films are highly creative and thought-provoking,while some plays are light-hearted or comm

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Charlie^^
Thank you for sharing.
You shared some insightful ideas again today.
Nice work!
_T. SHAY^^
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Yes, I partly agree with this idea. 
>>Correct
OR: I agree with this idea to some extent.
Movies are generally more accessible because they are widely distributed, affordable, and convenient to watch.
>>Correct
OR: Movies are easier for most people to access since they're everywhere, cheaper, and you can watch them anytime.
In contrast, plays often require going to a theater which is located in specific area of a country, purchasing tickets, and sometimes even traveling to specific cities, which makes them less accessible to the general public.
>>In contrast, plays often require going to a theater which is located in specific area of a country, purchasing tickets, and sometimes even traveling to specific cities, making them less accessible to the general public.
OR: In contrast, attending a play often involves traveling to a theater--typically located in specific parts of a country--buying tickets, and sometimes even going to a particular city, which reduces accessibility for the general public.
On the other hand, plays are often considered more artistic because of their raw, live nature.
>>Correct
OR: Unlike movies, plays are often seen as more artistic, offering a raw, live experience that highlights the performers' real-time talent and emotion.
Theater performances rely heavily on the actors’ presence, timing, and emotional expression, without the help of editing, CGI, or camera angles.
>>Correct
OR: Theater depends a lot on the actors performing live, using their voice, movement, and emotion--without any editing, special effects, or camera tricks.
This can create a more intimate and intense experience, which many people find artistically rich and meaningful.
>>Correct
OR: Such performances often foster a deeper emotional connection, which audiences frequently perceive as artistically profound and meaningful.
However, what i consider the most important in this quention is that both films and plays can be incredibly artistic or purely for entertainment, depending on how they are made.
>>However, what I consider the most important in this question is that both films and plays can be incredibly artistic or purely for entertainment, depending on how they are made.
OR: Ultimately, I believe the most important point is that both films and plays have the potential to be deeply artistic or simply entertaining, depending on the creator's intention and execution.
Some films are highly creative and thought-provoking,while some plays are light-hearted or comm
>>Some films are highly creative and thought-provoking, while some plays are light-hearted or comedic.
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