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Are you influenced by what you see on TV? Or by what you read?

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2025-07-26 103

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In my personal opinion, I think I'm very influenced by what I watch on TV. There are many reasons why I think so.
First, people these days have more media exposure than they read.
For example, there are more people who watch TV or YouTube than people who read books or magazines. In addition, the age of viewing video is getting younger, so it will be easy for media to be affectd from an early age.
Second, the video is more memorable and easy to attract people's attention than watching it in text.
Because each person has different understanding skills, it takes different time to understand and accept texts, but is takes less time to accept the video unless there is a problem with watching and listening. Also, videos are more convenient to understand.

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Hello, Yun!
You are really diligent in writing your composition, and I always value the time you dedicate to this. Thank you!
Chammy
In my personal opinion, I think I'm very influenced by what I watch on TV. 
OR
>>Personally, I believe that what I watch on television has a significant impact on me.
There are many reasons why I think so.
OR
>>I believe this for several reasons.
First, people these days have more media exposure than they read.
>> First, people these days have more media exposure than books.
For example, there are more people who watch TV or YouTube than people who read books or magazines.
OR
>> For example, more people watch TV or use YouTube than read books or publications.
 In addition, the age of viewing video is getting younger, so it will be easy for media to be affected from an early age.
>> In addition, the average age of video viewing is getting younger, making it easier for media to be affected from a young age.
Second, the video is more memorable and easy to attract people's attention than watching it in text.
>> Second, the video is more memorable and easier to attract people's attention than watching it in text.
Because each person has different understanding skills, it takes different time to understand and accept texts, but is takes less time to accept the video unless there is a problem with watching and listening. 
>> Because each person has different understanding skills, it takes different times to understand and accept texts, but it takes less time to accept the video, unless there is a problem with watching and listening. 
Also, videos are more convenient to understand.
OR
>> Also, videos are easier to comprehend.
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