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HOMEWORK: What¡¯s the most memorable vacation you¡¯ve had?

I remembered that I went Kota Kinabalu in Malaysia.
I was first trip after honeymoon.
But It is terrible. because It is rainny on trip. and Hotel is terrible. lizard appearance in the room.
My wife is screamed and cried. I don' forget on vacation.
But the sunset in Kota Kinabalu is very nice. and Boating and scuba diving, in the sea, it was very good.

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H! Sir Chang Min, this is such a funny story to tell, and I enjoyed reading about your memorable vacation. I hope you can add more unforgettable experiences together with your wife. Here are the corrections I've made to make your storytellingperfect. T. Linda

I remembered that I went Kota Kinabalu in Malaysia.
>> I remember when I went to Kota Kinabalu in Malaysia.

I was first trip after honeymoon.
>> It was our first trip after the honeymoon.

But It is terrible. because It is rainny on trip. and Hotel is terrible. lizard appearance in the room.
>> But it was a terrible trip since it was a raining during the trip, the hotel is terrible and lizard appeared in the room.

My wife is screamed and cried. I don' forget on vacation.
>>My wife screamed and cried. I can't forget that vacation.

But the sunset in Kota Kinabalu is very nice. and Boating and scuba diving, in the sea, it was very good.
>> But the sunset in Kota Kinabalu is very nice, boating, scuba diving,and the sea, it was very good.

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