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Q : Do you think phone calls will become less common in the future? Why?

A : Yes, I do.
Since voice mail and other technologies are developing fast, phone calls would become less common.
It is reluctant to use phone calls to me and my friends because we need to ready what to say and we can make mistake by phone calls.
Spilled words cannot be canceled.
But we can change voice messages before sending it.
So, I think phone calls would become less common in the future.

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Hi Eddy,
Thank you for taking the time to answer this essay. :)
These days, voice messages are really popular for many reasons, and I totally agree with your sentiment.
Thank you for your time tonight. See you again tomorrow, if you're not busy. :)
- Teacher Elly~


A : Yes, I do.
>> CORRECT

Since voice mail and other technologies are developing fast, phone calls would become less common.
>> 
Since voicemail and other technologies are developing rapidly, phone calls will become less common.

It is reluctant to use phone calls to me and my friends because we need to ready what to say and we can make mistake by phone calls.
>> 
My friends and I are reluctant to use phone calls because we need to prepare what to say, and we might make mistakes when making them.

Spilled words cannot be canceled.
>> 
Once words are spoken, they cannot be taken back.
OR >> You can¡¯t take back spoken words.

But we can change voice messages before sending it.
>> 
However, we can change voice messages before sending them.

So, I think phone calls would become less common in the future.
>> So, I think phone calls will become less common in the future.

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