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What¡¯s something you usually do to fend off stress?

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My favorite way to prevent stress is hanging out with my husband.
Before I married, I ususally hung out with my friends, such as drinking alchol,singing song, chating on the cafe.
I thought that these actions made me free, so I could deal with my stress I had at work.
However, nowadays I felt like more comfortable spending time with my family than friends.
Particularly, I and my husband prefer spending time outside to inside, sometimes, I got bored when I stay in the my house. I thought that these types was depended on the preferrence.
For the very hot summer, many people struggled to the heat wave and do and this heat I experienced first time so I can't find the fending off the stress for winning the heat, but finally I get over and find peaceful mind.

*Sorry, Cathy, I can't finalize my essay, it's topic is concerned with my mind, so I can't connect my experience and essay skills, please consider poor writing while you read.

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Hi Gloria 🌷

 

Thank you so much for sharing your writing. First, I want to tell you, you did great. I can really feel your emotions and your honesty in every sentence. That¡¯s something very special, and it takes strength to express feelings like that, especially when you're dealing with a lot. Please don¡¯t apologize, writing about something close to your heart is never ¡°poor writing.¡± In fact, it shows depth, and I admire that so much.

I truly liked how you described the change in your life. From spending time with friends before marriage to now finding comfort and peace with your husband. That shows growth, maturity, and self-awareness. And I can tell how much you value meaningful time with the people you love. 💛

To help you feel more confident in writing, here are a few suggestions you can try next time:

 Start simple and clear. Begin with your main idea in one sentence, like: ¡°When I feel stressed, I spend time with my husband to relax and feel better.¡±

 Give one or two examples. Share a short story, like a walk you took together or a trip to a café, something that helped you forget your stress.

 End with a reflection. For example: ¡°These small moments help me remember that I¡¯m not alone, and I feel more peaceful.¡±

Even when the topic feels too emotional or hard to explain, just write like you¡¯re talking to a kind friend. You can always organize and revise later. The most important part is already there, your voice, your feelings, and your story.

You're doing better than you think, Gloria. Life is heavy sometimes, but you're showing up, writing, and learning. That¡¯s something to be proud of. I believe in you. Let¡¯s keep going together, one word at a time. 🌿

With all my support,

~Teacher Cathy

 

My favorite way to prevent stress is hanging out with my husband.

>>CORRECT

OR>>My favorite way to relieve stress is by spending time with my husband.

Before I married, I ususally hung out with my friends, such as drinking alchol,singing song, chating on the cafe.

>>Before I got married, I usually hung out with my friends, drinking alcohol, singing songs, and chatting at cafés.

I thought that these actions made me free, so I could deal with my stress I had at work.

>>I thought that these actions made me free, so I could deal with the stress I had at work.

OR>>I felt that these activities gave me a sense of freedom and helped me cope with the stress from work.

However, nowadays I felt like more comfortable spending time with my family than friends.

>>However, these days I feel more comfortable spending time with my family than with friends.

Particularly, I and my husband prefer spending time outside to inside, sometimes, I got bored when I stay in the my house.

>>My husband and I especially prefer spending time outdoors rather than staying indoors. Sometimes I get bored when I stay home for too long.

I thought that these types was depended on the preferrence.

>>I think these preferences just depend on personal taste.

OR>>I believe these kinds of choices depend on individual preferences.

For the very hot summer, many people struggled to the heat wave and do and this heat I experienced first time so I can't find the fending off the stress for winning the heat, but finally I get over and find peaceful mind.

>>During this extremely hot summer, many people struggled with the heatwave. It was my first time experiencing such intense heat, and at first, I didn¡¯t know how to manage the stress it caused. But eventually, I overcame it and found peace of mind.

 

*Sorry, Cathy, I can't finalize my essay, it's topic is concerned with my mind, so I can't connect my experience and essay skills, please consider poor writing while you read.

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