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Should there be a legal limit on how many hours students can study at academies? Why or why not?

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A lot of students are now going to academies and it increases their academic stress and it makes children sleep less. So they should have limit on study time in the academy if academy takes up too much time in their schedule then they wouldn¡¯t have no time for schoolwork or sleeping or they are meal time so if they have limit time on their academy, it would make them more affordable..

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Thank you for this Eugene!

A lot of students are now going to academies and it increases their academic stress and it makes children sleep less. 
>>>  A lot of students are now going to academies and it increases their academic stress and makes them sleep less. 
>>> OR: Many students now attend academies, which increases their academic stress and reduces their sleep. 
So they should have limit on study time in the academy
>>> Because of this, they should have a limit on study time in the academy.
>>> OR: There should be a limit on study time at academies. 
 if academy takes up too much time in their schedule then they wouldn¡¯t have no time for schoolwork or sleeping or they are meal time
>>>  If academy takes up too much of their time, they wouldn¡¯t have time for schoolwork, sleeping or even meal time. 
>>> OR:  If academies take up too much time in a student¡¯s schedule, they may not have enough time for schoolwork, sleep, or even meals. 
so if they have limit time on their academy, it would make them more affordable.
>>>  By limiting academy hours, students could have a more balanced and manageable routine.
 
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