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1,I can¡¯t send it back because I think of the person who made it.
2,I will just not mention it and probably never go again the restaurant.
3,I want to write a review about the taste of the food.

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Good afternoo, Ms. Jane!

Here's your corrected composition. I appreciate your sending it.  Please go over the revisions given below. 

Also, next time, I'd appreciate it if you were to add the Essay question under the Title section on this composition correction page. The title is not "Homework" but the Essay Question I give, for example, the Essay Question for last Thursday's homework was: "Would you send a dish back if it did not taste good or if you received the wrong food?" and you should be putting this question under the Title section on this page. I hope that was clear but should you have further questions or clarification, feel free to send me a message on this website. Have a wonderful day there!  


Cheers,
Jean~~



                   Would you send a dish back if it did not taste good or if you received the wrong food?
                   
               
I can¡¯t send it back because I think of the person who made it.
>>> I can¡¯t return it because I¡¯m thinking about the person who made it.
>>> OR: Returning it feels wrong because I value the effort of the person who created it.

I will just not mention it and probably never go again the restaurant.
>>> I¡¯ll just let it go and avoid that restaurant in the future.
>>> OR: Out of respect, I won¡¯t mention it, but I doubt I¡¯ll return to that restaurant.

I want to write a review about the taste of the food.
>>> I want to write a review commenting on the food¡¯s taste.
>>> OR: I plan to write a critique highlighting the flavors of the food.
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