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I think social media is very important for singers.

They use it to show their music and talk to fans.

Many people follow singers on social media.
So more followers can mean more popularity.

When they have a new song, they post it on social media.

So now, social media gives a big influence to singers.

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I think social media is very important for singers.
>>> OR: I believe social media plays a crucial role in a singer's career.

They use it to show their music and talk to fans.
>>> They use it to showcase their music and engage with fans.

Many people follow singers on social media.
So more followers can mean more popularity.
>>> Many people follow singers on social media, which often translates into greater popularity.
>>> OR: Social media followers can directly influence a singer¡¯s level of fame.

When they have a new song, they post it on social media.
>>> OR: When they release a new song, they promote it on social media.

So now, social media gives a big influence to singers.
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