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individualistic mindset of Koreans might made them lonely or feel isolated, but it also made them can depend on themselves. 
>>> The individualistic mindset of Koreans might make them feel lonely or isolated, but it also allows them to depend on themselves.   
Anyway, because they are so individualistic many people are living alone. 
>>> However, because they are so individualistic, many people live alone.   
So individualistic mindset contribute Korea¡¯s increasing lonely death.
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