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I think the earth is becoming hotter and hotter. To prepare better for extreme hotter weather, we should improve our ability to endure the hotter weather. Now in Korea, most people can not go without air conditioner. They turn on them day and night with very cooler temperature. That's why some people suffer from cooling disorder. Many doctors advised us to make the difference between outdoor and indoor temperature less than 5 degrees. I think it is good for our health and helps save energy.

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Hi, Gi Yean!
You are correct! We can really feel the effects of global warming nowadays, and I think it might be a little too late to reverse it, so the only thing we can do is adapt to it. I think the doctors¡¯ advice is really something to take note of, but people who are not used to hot temperatures might find it difficult to follow.
- T. Caitlyn
I think the earth is becoming hotter and hotter. 
>> CORRECT
To prepare better for extreme hotter weather, we should improve our ability to endure the hotter weather. 
>> To better prepare for extremely hot weather, we should improve our ability to endure the heat.
Now in Korea, most people cannot go without air conditioner. 
>> CORRECT
They turn on them day and night with very cooler temperature. 
>> They turn them on day and night at very cool temperatures.
That's why some people suffer from cooling disorder. 
>> That's why some people suffer from cold-related illnesses.
Many doctors advised us to make the difference between outdoor and indoor temperature less than 5 degrees. 
>> Many doctors advise us to keep the difference between outdoor and indoor temperatures less than 5 degrees.
I think it is good for our health and helps save energy.
>> CORRECT
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