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I went to climb Daecheongbong Peak in Seorak Mountain four years ago. Before that, I was weak and often was sick. I also didn¡¯t exercise anything. I decided to take care of myself, so I started exercise with a personal trainer. For two years, I exercised very hard and I started be healthy. After that, I enjoyed climbing. Climbing the top of the mountain gave me great confidence. Although I have a neck disc now, I should go climbing again. Although I have also retired because of a neck disc, I will definitely live a second life.

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Good evening, Jane!

You are very passionate about all the activities that you choose to do. Furthermore, you are not hampered by the fact that your neck may be in pain. You just keep pushing in climbing mountains and achieving your goal to be healthier in spite of your condition. With this, you are a life champion!

Now that you have retired, you can focus on being healthier and inspiring people around you to stay active and fit. They can be unstoppable even with their physical limitations.

There are a few grammar suggestions I left here in some of your sentences. They are word arrangements, verb forms, prepositions, and vocabulary selection. Please go over them carefully. Overall, a job well done!

See you in class.

-T. Donna~

I went to climb Daecheongbong Peak in Seorak Mountain four years ago. Before that, I was weak and often was sick. I also didn¡¯t exercise anything. I decided to take care of myself, so I started exercise with a personal trainer. 
>> I went to climb Daecheongbong Peak in Seorak Mountain four years ago. Before that, I was weak and was often sick. I also didn¡¯t exercise. I decided to take care of myself, so I started exercising with a personal trainer. 

For two years, I exercised very hard and I started be healthy. After that, I enjoyed climbing. Climbing the top of the mountain gave me great confidence. Although I have a neck disc now, I should go climbing again. 
>> For two years, I exercised very hard and I started to be healthy. After that, I enjoyed climbing. Climbing the top of the mountain gave me great confidence. Although I have a neck disc (problem/ challenge/ difficulty) now, I should go climbing again. 

Although I have also retired because of a neck disc, I will definitely live a second life.
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