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[Writing Task] What do you think is your most expensive item? Please respond in 3-5 sentences.

oh.. expensive item.. I think that my house is very expensive. My house is my name.
and My car is very expensive. I bought 2 years ago for my family.
because My son was born. I need more big car.
When I choice a car, I followed my wife word. At first I want buy a other design car.
but I bought family car for my family.
and next expensive item.. my stock.
I gather my stock once a month.

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Good evening, Chang Min!

Regardless of the monetary value of your belongings, to "treasure everything you own, expensive or not" means to value and appreciate them all.
It entails appreciating the importance of even seemingly insignificant objects, whether they have sentimental value, are useful in real life, or enhance your general well-being.

Have a good night!

__Teacher Mayleen :)


oh.. expensive item.. I think that my house is very expensive. My house is my name.
>>> Oh, an expensive item I own? I think that my house is very expensive. My house is in my name.
and My car is very expensive. I bought 2 years ago for my family.
>>> My car is also very expensive. I bought it 2 years ago for my family.
because My son was born. I need more big car.
>>> Now that I have a son, I need a bigger car.
When I choice a car, I followed my wife word. At first I want buy a other design car.

but I bought family car for my family.
>>> When I chose my car, I did what my wife said. At first, I wanted to get a different vehicle, but I purchased a family car for my family.
and next expensive item.. my stock.
I gather my stock once a month.
>>> Another expensive thing I own is my stocks. I withdraw my gains once a month.
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