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Q : What do you think is the biggest advantage of being organized?

A : I think the biggest advantage of being organized is saving time.
By organizing, I can find needed information fast.
Also, By organizing, I can double-check things to do.
So, I will not miss something and it can save time too.

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Hi Eddy,
I totally agree with your answer. By keeping things organized, you can quickly find what you need, which makes tasks smoother and helps you stay productive throughout the day. Thank you for taking the time to answer this question.~^^
I'll see you tomorrow, if you're not busy. Good night!~^^
- Teacher Elly~


A : I think the biggest advantage of being organized is saving time.
>> CORRECT
OR >> In my opinion, the greatest advantage of being organized is that it saves time.

By organizing, I can find needed information fast.
>> 
By being organized, I can find the information I need quickly.

Also, By organizing, I can double-check things to do.
>> 
Also, by being organized, I can double-check my tasks.

So, I will not miss something and it can save time too.
>> This way, I won¡¯t miss anything, and I can save time as well.
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