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How many hours of sleep do you need?

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I usually sleep about 7 hours a day. Years ago, I usually slept about 5 to 6 hours. At that time, I always was very tired beacuse I did not sleep enough. To stay healthy, people need to eat well, quality sleep and regular exercise.``

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Hello there, Jane!

It is great to hear that you are getting more sleep than before. Retirement suites you well. With all the work and activities you do, you deserve ample time to rest.

This can also ease a lot of tension on your neck disk.

Thank you for writing this homework answer. Please consider my suggestions below. Numbers below 11 (eleven) should ne written in words; verbs come first before adverbs; and when giving examples, make sure the form is only one (all verbs or all nouns). Nonetheless, you did a wonderful job here on this homework.

See you next week!

-T. Donna~

I usually sleep about 7 hours a day. Years ago, I usually slept about 5 to 6 hours. At that time, I always was very tired beacuse I did not sleep enough. To stay healthy, people need to eat well, quality sleep and regular exercise.
>> I usually sleep about seven (7) hours a day. Years ago, I usually slept about 5 to 6 hours. At that time, I was always very tired because I did not sleep enough. To stay healthy, people need to eat well, have quality sleep and exercise regularly.

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