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Write about a special event, festival, holiday, or activity celebrated in February.

차유진/2025-02-04

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
First, my brother's birthday 🎂 and Jeongwol Full Moon Festival. It is a to worship the moon. That day eat vegetables and play jwibulnori, jwibulnori is playing with fire.
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Here's another corrected composition, Yale! Many thanks for sending it. Please take a look at the few revisions and alternative expressions provided. Have a good evening there! 


Cheers,
Jean~~



                                          

                

            Write about a special event, festival, holiday, or activity celebrated in February.


First, my brother's birthday 🎂 and Jeongwol Full Moon Festival. It is a to worship the moon.
>> First is my brother's birthday and Jeongwol Full Moon Festival, which is about worshipping the moon. 

That day eat vegetables and play jwibulnori, jwibulnori is playing with fire.
>> On that day, we eat vegetables and jwibulnori, which is a game in which we play with fire. 
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