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Today , it.s too hard.!!

조영진/2025-02-04

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Today was snowing a lot. Yesterday, My daughter's boots are torn. So, after they drop in school, I went to shoes store. I bought daughter's boots. And it brought to her. However, I had a accident. ㅠㅠ My car slipped a road. And dump it another car. But it's small accident. becouse this car was parking and noting in the car. I was so suprised. ㅠㅠ And get stressed.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hey there, Yeong Jin. I'm sorry to hear about your day. I hope the situation was resolved easily. Your sentence structure is improving, and you are beginning to use more complex sentences. Keep up the good work. Stay safe and I hope the road situation gets better. See you in class. ~Teacher Jane c",) 


Today was snowing a lot. 
>> CORRECT 

Yesterday, My daughter's boots are torn.
>> Yesterday, my daughter's boots were torn.

So, after they drop in school, I went to shoes store. 
>> So after I dropped them off at school I went to the shoe store. 

I bought daughter's boots. And it brought to her.
>> I bought my daughter's boots and I brought them to her. 

However, I had a accident. ㅠㅠ
>> However, I had an accident. 

My car slipped a road. And dump it another car.
>> My car slipped on the road and I bumped into another car. 

But it's small accident. becouse this car was parking and noting in the car.
>> It was a small accident because he was parking his car. 

I was so suprised. ㅠㅠ And get stressed.
>> I was so surprised and stressed. 

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