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김우인/2025-05-11

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The best birthday gift that I have ever received is a blue watch. I got this watch when I was about 9 years old. At that time I only have worn childish watch that I craved for watch which seemed more like an adult. For some reason I had thought the watch that adults wore seemed more cool, even though children's watch had more attractive cartoon character on it. The reason this is the best present is because I had worn it for about 13 years since then. I was attached to that watch and I especially liked the clear blue color of it. This watch is the definitely the gift that I used for a longest time and also frequently during that long period. I eventually throw it away last year because its band was worn down too much to wear it more. However, it's still the best gift in my mind.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Ms. WooIn! Thirteen years is such a long time to keep something! That alone says so much about how meaningful the gift was to you. Thank you for sharing!
-T. Sonny
The best birthday gift that I have ever received is a blue watch. 
>>The best birthday gift I have ever received is a blue watch.
I got this watch when I was about 9 years old. 
>>Correct!
At that time I only have worn childish watch that I craved for watch which seemed more like an adult. 
>>At that time, I had only worn childish watches, and I really wanted one that looked more like something an adult would wear.
For some reason I had thought the watch that adults wore seemed more cool, even though children's watch had more attractive cartoon character on it.
>>For some reason, I thought adult watches seemed cooler, even though kids' watches had more attractive cartoon characters on them.
The reason this is the best present is because I had worn it for about 13 years since then. 
>>This gift is the best because I wore it for about 13 years after that.
I was attached to that watch and I especially liked the clear blue color of it. 
>>I was very attached to that watch, and I especially liked its clear blue color.
This watch is the definitely the gift that I used for a longest time and also frequently during that long period.
>>It was definitely the gift I used the longest and the most frequently during that period.

I eventually throw it away last year because its band was worn down too much to wear it more. 
>>I eventually threw it away last year because its band was too worn out to wear anymore.
However, it's still the best gift in my mind.
>>Correct
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