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Should cyclists be reuired to take a safety course before riding in traffic?

오혜영/2025-05-15

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Should cyclists be required to take a safety course before riding in traffic? My answer is yes. I believe that the safety course will reduce many incidents rather than that we don't take a safety course. So, I'd like to be common course in school because many students like riding a bicycle and a kind of this education will be good for us when we grown up. I think it includes for the course to take safety equipment and keep the rule about riding a bicycle. If we know about these things, then we can be better riders together. Hello. Elly It is rain, today. It is not the same as the weather of yesterday. I wrote my thought about your question. See you later, today's class. Thank you.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Stella,
Thank you for taking the time to answer this essay. :)

I agree with you. This should be taught in P.E. class, isn't it? I hope everyone will wear safety equipment while riding a bicycle. Precaution is better than the cure. I'll see you again next week. Have a lovely weekend with your family. :)

- Teacher Elly~

My answer is yes.

>> CORRECT

I believe that the safety course will reduce many incidents rather than that we don't take a safety course.

>> I believe that taking the safety course will reduce many incidents compared to not taking it.

So, I'd like to be common course in school because many students like riding a bicycle and a kind of this education will be good for us when we grown up.

>> So, I think it should be a common course in school because many students enjoy riding bicycles, and this kind of education will be beneficial when we grow up.

I think it includes for the course to take safety equipment and keep the rule about riding a bicycle.

>> I think the course should include using safety equipment and following the rules of bicycle riding.

If we know about these things, then we can be better riders together.
>> CORRECT

OR >> If we learn about these things, we can become better riders together.

Hello. Elly

>> Hello, Elly

It is rain, today.

>> It is raining today.

It is not the same as the weather of yesterday.

>> It is not the same as yesterday's weather.

I wrote my thought about your question.

>> I wrote down my thoughts about your question.

See you later, today's class.

>> See you later in today's class.

Thank you.

>> CORRECT