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How do the seasons affect your mood or energy levels?

이승훈/2025-06-24

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
i don't like winter. because when i was cold, i wearing many clothes. so i feel unconfortable. and i feel frustrating. and i want sleep every day in winter. same as when sleep animal during winter. but i like summer better than winter. because i feel less than hot. so i eatting icecream and patbingsu. that are very delicious and sweet. i like sweet things. but try to less eat now a days. because i for healtylife.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Hun!
Thank you for sharing with me that you prefer summer over winter because at least you can eat delicious desserts in summer. I feel the same way as you when it comes to cold weather. I just want to hibernate like what animals do, just sleeping and lying down in bed all the time. Great job in writing! Just take note that "I" is always capitalized.
- T. Caitlyn 
i don't like winter. because when i was cold, i wearing many clothes.
>>  I don’t like winter because when I’m cold, I wear many clothes.
so i feel unconfortable. and i feel frustrating.
>> So I feel uncomfortable, and I feel frustrated.
and i want sleep every day in winter.
>>  Also, I want to sleep every day in winter.
same as when sleep animal during winter.
>>  It’s like how animals sleep during winter.
but I like summer better than winter.
>> CORRECT
because i feel less than hot. so i eatting icecream and patbingsu.
>> Because I feel hot, so I eat ice cream and patbingsu.
that are very delicious and sweet.
>> They are very delicious and sweet. 
I like sweet things.
>> CORRECT
but try to less eat now a days. because i for healtylife.
>> But I try to eat less nowadays because I want a healthy life.
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