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What are three things you want to purchase for yourself?

김일환/2025-06-29

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First, I want to buy a MacBook. It is a laptop made by Apple. I love Apple products. I am a software engineer who mainly works on Windows. Actually, I don't really need a MacBook for work, but I want to have it. Second, I want to have a SUV. As I told you before, I bought my car fifteen years old. I want to have a new car. The one I have now is a sedan. I have two children, and they are getting bigger and bigger. SUV also is trending. Third, I want to get a drone. Before flying a drone, I should get a license. If I have one, I will travel to many places to take pictures. Can you imagine what my plan is? I will travel many places in my SUV to take pictures by the drone, and then I will edit them on my MacBook.

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Good evening, Hwanny!

To be a good shopper, prioritize information, budgeting, and comparing possibilities. Before making a purchase, you should first analyze your needs, research items, and compare pricing. Being a savvy buyer entails thinking about the long-term worth of your purchases and avoiding impulse purchases.

Practice English whenever you can.^^

__T. Mayleen :)

>>> OR: First, I'd like to acquire a MacBook. It's an Apple laptop. I enjoy Apple products. I am a software engineer who primarily works with Windows. Actually, I don't actually need a MacBook for business, but I would want to have one.

Second, I want to have a SUV. As I told you before, I bought my car fifteen years old. I want to have a new car. The one I have now is a sedan. I have two children, and they are getting bigger and bigger. SUV also is trending.
>>> Second, I want to have an SUV. As I told you before, I bought my car fifteen years ago. I want to have a new car. The one I have now is a sedan. I have two children, and they are getting bigger and bigger. SUV is the trend now.

>>> OR: Second, I want to own an SUV. As I already stated, I acquired my car fifteen years ago. I want to get a new car. I currently have a sedan. I have two children, and they are becoming bigger. SUVs are the current trend.

Third, I want to get a drone. Before flying a drone, I should get a license. If I have one, I will travel to many places to take pictures.
>>> CORRECT

>>> OR: Third, I want to get a drone. Before I operate a drone, I should obtain a license. If I have one, I plan to travel to various locations to snap photographs.

Can you imagine what my plan is? I will travel many places in my SUV to take pictures by the drone, and then I will edit them on my MacBook.

>>> Can you imagine what my plan is? I will travel to many places in my SUV to take pictures by drone, and then I will edit them on my MacBook.

>>> OR: Can you figure out what my plan is? I'll drive around in my SUV and shoot drone photos, which I'll then edit on my MacBook.