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What are some ways companies contribute to helping society? Explain.

김영순/2025-06-30

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There are some ways : First,a company creates lots of jobs and hires employees. Second , it helps elderly people who live alone,disabled people. Third, it makes a community to share the social culture

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Hi Young Soon!
Thank you for the valuable attempt.
I always appreciate your efforts!
Stay diligent!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon

There are some ways :

>> There are some ways.
First,a company creates lots of jobs and hires employees.

>> First, a company creates lots of jobs and hires employees.
Second , it helps elderly people who live alone,disabled people.

>> Second , it helps elderly people who live alone and disabled people.
Third, it makes a community to share the social culture

>> Third, it helps a community to share social culture.