​​Q : Write a short paragraph (3 - 5 sentences or more) about a time you had to carry on with something even though it was difficult. A : To me, the time I have to carry on is now. Recently, I am facing some difficult things. First, I have to find new buyers and make appointments for the future business trip. Second, I have to finish video call class within this year to get a subsidy from my company. Finally, I have to learn AIs and make a result that can support co-workers. They are very difficult things but I am thinking that it can be very helpful to me after completing them.

Hi Eddie! It’s so great to see your writing again, you’ve really done an excellent job with this response. I can clearly see your growth, not just in your English skills, but also in your mindset. You’ve shared a real and honest moment from your life, and the way you organized your thoughts was very clear and easy to follow.

I especially admire how you listed the three challenges you're currently facing. That structure makes your paragraph very strong and focused. Your final sentence also gives the reader a sense of your positive attitude and determination, which is very inspiring. Even though these tasks sound tough, you're already showing the kind of mindset that leads to success.

You’re doing a great job balancing your work, your goals, and your personal development. Keep it up, Eddie, I’m really proud of you. You're on the right track!

~Teacher Cathy

 

To me, the time I have to carry on is now.

>>CORRECT

OR>>To me, this is the moment I must carry on.

Recently, I am facing some difficult things.

>>Recently, I have been facing some difficult things.

First, I have to find new buyers and make appointments for the future business trip.

>>CORRECT

OR>>First, I need to find new buyers and schedule appointments for an upcoming business trip.

Second, I have to finish video call class within this year to get a subsidy from my company.

>>Secondly, I have to complete the video call class within this year to receive a subsidy from my company.

Finally, I have to learn AIs and make a result that can support co-workers.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Finally, I need to learn about AI and produce results that can help my co-workers.

They are very difficult things but I am thinking that it can be very helpful to me after completing them.

>>These things are very difficult, but I believe they will be very helpful to me once I complete them.