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How can getting older help people understand life better?

이지윤/2025-07-24

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As you get older, your thoughts and mind become wider and I think it can help you to accept and look at life more felxibly. There is a saying that when you get older, you start to see things that you didn't see when you were young. This is because there are many experiences and knowledge accumulated over time.
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Hey there, Ji Yun. Great job on the homework. Your writing is clear and generally well-structured. Also, your sentences are organized. Thank you for taking the time to check the homework topic and share your thoughts about it. I appreciate it. I hope you are having a great evening. Cheers! ~Teacher Jane c",) 


As you get older, your thoughts and mind become wider and I think it can help you to accept and look at life more flexibly.
>> As you get older, you become wiser, and I think it can help you accept and look at life more flexibly.

There is a saying that when you get older, you start to see things that you didn't see when you were young.
>> CORRECT 

This is because there are many experiences and knowledge accumulated over time.
>> CORRECT 
>> OR: This is because many experiences and knowledge are accumulated over time.
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