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What is your favorite holiday in Korea and Why?

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Dea r Don,

I love Happy New Year Day, but In Korea, I really love Lunar New Year day. All people want to start new somethings on new day.
In new year day, we make a plan to do. for example, do diet, study English, run marathon and so on.
This new year, I want to go to a mountain near my house with my son. during 1 year, my son have studied hard for passing test of University. now, my son finished it and he has a little time for relax. I asked my son to go to the mountain and he accepted my suggetion.

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Hi Andrew!

Let me check your composition now. See you in a while.


Dear Don,

I love Happy New Year Day, but In Korea, I really love Lunar New Year day. All people want to start new somethings on new day.
>> I love New Years Day, but In Korea, I really love Lunar New Years day. All people want to start new things on a New Years day.

In new year day, we make a plan to do. for example, do diet, study English, run marathon and so on.
>> In New Years day, we make plans to do. For example, do diet, study English, run on a marathon and so on.

This new year, I want to go to a mountain near my house with my son. during 1 year, my son have studied hard for passing test of University. now, my son finished it and he has a little time for relax. I asked my son to go to the mountain and he accepted my suggetion.
>> This new year, I want to go to a mountain near my house with my son. For 1 year, my son have studied hard to pass the University test. Now, my son finished it and he has a little time to relax. I asked my son to go to the mountain and he accepted my suggestion.
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